Found this going through my old stuff at my mother's house, I would have been 7 or 8 when I made this. A natural right?:free-real-estate:

  • Ithorian [comrade/them, he/him]
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    2 years ago

    I am 23 water-proof fleas eating the sun.”

    If that doesn't become a site tagline I'm going to be very disappointed

  • TheLegendaryCarrot23 [he/him]
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    2 years ago

    I feel like your trolling us (im very trollable) but if you actually wrote this when you were 7 or 8 then you unironically have a pretty special mind .

    • HoChiMaxh [he/him]
      hexagon
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      2 years ago

      Haha it is legit comrade, I can show you other poems from this collection if it would convince you - one is actually even cooler but would dox me. The other one is plainly much worse like a child obviously wrote it, but in it I do assert that on Saturday I swindled seventy states which isn't bad I suppose

      • TheLegendaryCarrot23 [he/him]
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        2 years ago

        lol dude that's awesome . Not to be too dramatic and blow smoke up your ass but the line "I am 23 water proof flees eating the sun" reminds me of the prose in Las Chants De Maldoror which is one the greatest poem's ever written.

        • SuperZutsuki [they/them, any]
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          2 years ago

          Okay, I want to check out that poem but I don't know French and there's like 7 translations. Any idea which one I should go for?

          • TheLegendaryCarrot23 [he/him]
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            2 years ago

            https://books.google.com/books/about/Maldoror_Les_Chants_de_Maldoror.html?id=EEyxCgAAQBAJ#v=onepage&q&f=false

  • MC_Kublai [none/use name]
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    edit-2
    2 years ago

    I didn’t even see the part about this being made by you as a kid, the words and their font managed to bring on an intense sense of dread, almost Lynchian even

    tbf I just ripped my pen lol

  • HornyOnMain
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    2 years ago

    Tag yourself: I'm 23 WATER-PROOF FLEAS EATING THE SUN

  • Wertheimer [any]
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    2 years ago

    "I should have been a pair of ragged claws / Scuttling across the floors of silent seas."

    Ugh, too sentimental. Let's go with "I shop in a black glove with rabies / I am 23 water-proof fleas eating the sun."